Even though I wrote about GREEN yesterday in my daily-ish Stafford poem…
…I just couldn’t stop thinking about this sudden surge of LIFE. I was inspired by Margaret to try a skinny. They are lots harder than they look!
This lush and juicy world —
green
above
below
around
green
sprouting
flowering
seeding
green
and juicy, this lush world.
(c) Mary Lee Hahn, 2024 draft
Patricia has this week’s Poetry Friday roundup at Reverie.
In other news, the roundup schedule for June-December is complete!
A(nother) Year of Reading 
oh yes, all the flavors and shades of green!
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Love the way you rearranged and flowed your words in the last line! So much pulsing green, I think it’s trying to talk… Thanks
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Yes, who would want to escape this Lucious spring color? I like the skinny poem form, it’s inviting, fun to write and seems so direct.
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Beautiful! I love the rearrangement of the words in the first and last lines to get just the right images.
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The skinny form feels perfect for spotlighting the aliveness of green – repetition and succinct. I think you did great!
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Another new (to me) form – thank you! I had to look up the form to understand the constraints, and you executed it masterfully in your green and juicy poem!
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Indeed, GREEN! Finally for us, enough rain and sunshine to brings out the tree leaves, too! I’m glad you wrote the skinny, too, lots to celebrate there!
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Oh, I like this – it immediately takes me to Ross Gay.
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Oh my, yes!
And what a compliment that my poem might be a conduit to Ross Gay and to THAT poem. (How did I not know it and why can’t I be the kind of person who knows poems so well that I can make connections like this?)
Thank you. And thanks also for that vulture with his “good suit of feathers.”
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Yes, Mary Lee, here’s to green! I heard someone interviewed yesterday (I can’t remember the situation.) If there could only be one color, what color would you choose? Green was her answer without hesitation. I thought to myself, Yes, that’s it. (As if I’d want to choose any other color!) I love the green and juicy and lush world you’ve created in your poems.
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Both. Your juicy skinny is right up my voluptuous alley, and the cherita is today’s message, and yesterday’s, and tomorrow’s. How are you making those with their blur-boxes?
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I make them in stories on Instagram! What you see here is a screenshot.
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A green scene, Mary Lee. This form is new to me. But like all things new, it has piqued my curiosity. It reminds me of a sandwich with its outer covers and rich filling inside. Enjoyed your transposition of the words in the two ‘wide’ lines.
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You have a green thumb as a poet, too, Mary Lee! Yes, to the ‘lush and juicy world’! 🙂
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yes, yes, yes, yes, and…..yes!
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These are terrific, Mary Lee. I love that knowing last line in the first one. And the skinny is awesome. Lush and juicy–perfect words. I agree, skinnys are hard. My favorite one I wrote was all wrong. I realized later it didn’t even have the write line count, etc. But I do love the form, and you nailed it.
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Give me all the green–I definitely don’t want to escape from it. Love this!
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Green’s my favorite color — and I’m reveling in it now that spring is here and all is lush and alive outdoors. 🙂
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You created a lush skinny, Mary Lee. Love it!
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Thanks for the shout out. Your skinny poem captures the lush beauty of green. Green is everywhere now. I need it like I need air.
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Greem is a color of that I can see out of the hospital window. Even though many days grey becomes the background, the essence of springtime is all around. Green is a joyous color when in isolation. Thank you for adding my name to the PF Roundup.
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